Talk:The Pointless Race for Spaghetti!/@comment-26429063-20151124105320

Well first thing first, the lines. I think that you are overusing the "z-" because one of the character is German, which annoys me, assuming that I'm a grammar-criticism. Second of all, the characters are a little bit... eh... nice to each other in my opinions. It could only be me, as I really despite friendship. Third, due to the facts that there are more than 50 characters, lots of the characters weren't give screen time, making them a stand-out. I think that a fan fiction should focus on everyone. Fourth, and finally, you should use something else than * because that really takes up all of your time to focus on the storyline.

The storyline itself is excellent, however, it is short considering that fact that there are more than 50 characters.

Overall, I would give it a 8.97/10.3