Talk:The Pointless Race for Spaghetti!/@comment-26429063-20151129095319

Well, first of all, misplacing of punctuation and capitalization and grammar mistakes is still a thing, but that is not that important to others people. However, it was very irritating to read the fan fiction, as there are many of them.

And second, remember when I said the parts are too short? Now, it's too long. Now, I don't a judging person, I don't need it to be perfect, but the "long" part could be used for previous episodes, because then there were more pairs, and now, there is less. Really, there was some unnecessary parts (like the first part, I think that the characters sharing their thoughts about the prize is not that interesting to read).

Third, friendship is still a thing. Cool. But yeah, the fan fiction is for others too, so again, I won't dig about it too much.

Finally, some of the "acting"/transcript still seems a little... childish and reused. Like Paper, Scissors, they often seems to scream at a little spider, and Candle and Peacey, seeing the "one talking to another one that can't talk" is a little bit... overused.

Overall, it is better than before, but not that much. The storyline should be improved with more original ideas, and unnecessary parts should be cut out. And you should consider adding full stops and commas to sentences, as the readers' brains will know when to stop when they are reading the transcript. Damn science.

Anyways, I would give it a 8.97/9.998, keep it up.