Talk:In a Permanent Burn/@comment-31165208-20170923160527

I like your hook. You are getting better at writing and description.

However, spelling things like more as "moar" may drive people away from your story and makes them annoyed.

You must also work on grammar, as "it's" means "it is". For example:

"I am very afraid of it's events" translates to "I am very afraid of it is events".