Talk:OC Popularity Vote - The Killing Games/@comment-27019559-20160531151522

Okay, so starting off, we have minor-major insulting words. Ugh. Great.

I would say this is "immature", as the character say what they are going to do next out loud, and straight forward (not trying to hide it by some other distractions), but again, every fan fictions are doing this now.

Also, logically, you, in the future, are sent back to the past, so if you die there, only you in the future would die, but your past won't, so in the future, you would still be fine. But you would die when this happen (if this is what you are trying to imply). This have no impact on the ratings, this is just here for you to know.

Third, again, I know this is becuase you are lazy and/or have works to do in real life, but the transition is just sudden. The newspaper just magically appear like the troubles in MLP. All those people just magically disappear like the antagonists in MLP. And File just magically jump in, just like the power of friedship in MLP. Because you are actually a human being, I will judge lightly on this.

And fourth, the punctuation are not correctly used, examples being the exclamation point for Drop and Strawberry's last line.

Enough criticism, the beginning is cool in someway. I guess. Yeah, I guess it has some parts where it was has...... Ugh, to be honest, it is a great introduction to the virus, and File, and also, telling how dangerous it is, which I hope you will make good uses of it in future episodes. The comedy is semi-good, which is actually better than all of my last ratings.

It builds up a great storyline, how this is in the past, how everyone went to the past, how File is a mysterious (?) character, but the dangerous part of the virus weren't that long or anything. It kinda ruins the intro for the infection. Also, the gap between this beginning and the prequel's ending is perfectly closed, except for the part where everyone got infected, of course. You didn't explain all of it, like where it comes from, who was... you get the point.

All and all, I would give it a.... 4/5. Just because it's funny. don't tell anyone I gave a fan ficiton above 80%.